Critque Time - New Squido Sales Page

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  • Profile picture of the author Jared Alberghini
    To be honest, it looks good, but not great... here's why...

    The sales copy assumes the reader knows exactly what Squidoo is...

    You are losing a ton of newbies in the tech-jargon that shows the benefits of using Squidoo...

    but what the heck is it?

    Take a step waaaaay back, and forget all of your technical skills, and start writing the sales copy as if you are talking to someone who has never heard of Squidoo, or social networking & web 2.0 for that matter...

    Many people have websites, and want more traffic... they want the solutions and simple 'for dummies' explinations on how exactly to accomplish that.

    Talk to your customers through your sales copy, and give them the info they need to decide whether to sign up with you or not...
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  • Profile picture of the author write-stuff
    Jared, you are, indeed, the man. Call it like you see it, bro. Much appreciated! And I suspect you're right on target.

    BTW, found your affiliate cloaking link and put it on this page:
    www.sixsecondsales.com/resources/internet-utilities.htm

    Regards. - Russ
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  • Profile picture of the author Jared Alberghini
    Thanks a bunch Russ,

    Glad to share my thoughts with you... that's what this community is all about!

    Also, thanks for the backlink to my link cloaker, I would be happy to do a review of your site(s) and post it at the main affiliatenichemonster.com website... just let me know what url's you would like me to review/link to.
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  • Profile picture of the author write-stuff
    So as not to spam the thread, I'll PM you. Thank you, suh.
    - Russ
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  • Profile picture of the author Jakehyten
    i couldnt figure out where to buy. make that order button bigger
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    • Profile picture of the author write-stuff
      Originally Posted by Jakehyten View Post

      i couldnt figure out where to buy. make that order button bigger
      Yeah, that would be a problem. The sign-up form states (but apparently not loudly enough) that the System is still under development. People who sign up now get the option to purchase it 50% off. It'll probably be completed in a couple of weeks. Hope you watched the first video. - Russ
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  • Profile picture of the author GeorgR.
    rendered cover looks ugly, site itself is nice, simple and structured. Dont like the brown background. Get a better cover creator, for a start.

    The whole site needs to be "flashier", use up-beat colors and not that all-in-one brown/mud coloring.

    This all just a "subjective" impression the site gives me, without having read most of the text.

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  • Profile picture of the author write-stuff
    Hey, thanx much for that feedback, George. Much appreciated.

    Anyone else, I'd really like to hear if you think the color-scheme is a problem. - Russ
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