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Squeeze Page - Opinions Please

by Vogin
8 replies
Hey Warriors,
we've just made ourselves a first squeeze page, because - no list, no fun.

If it isn't too much to ask, I'd be interested in your opinions.

Good, Bad? Design, words, length... anything that comes to your mind. Thanks!
#opinions #page #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author addykho
    I would suggest to have a picture there.. or else people will leave your landing page fast.
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    • Profile picture of the author dmor71
      It seems you need to work a bit of grammar and spelling.
      Should read more like:

      Title:
      Are You An Affiliate Marketer? This is a Must-Read!

      The first sentence after bullet questions:
      If you answered "NO" to any of these you need to read Affiliate Sins immediately and stop losing thousands of $$$ in potential earnings.

      Also you misspelled "receive" in the last sentence.
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      • Profile picture of the author leegs
        It would be great if you have testimonial(s) on your squeeze page. Your benefits are not very catchy and needs some improvements.

        Hope it helps...

        Raymond
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        • Profile picture of the author Vogin
          Originally Posted by leegs View Post

          It would be great if you have testimonial(s) on your squeeze page. Your benefits are not very catchy and needs some improvements.

          Hope it helps...

          Raymond
          Well yeah, but unless I fake them I don't really see how could I get them now, unless I google around and steal what someone already said about this particular PDF...
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      • Profile picture of the author Vogin
        Originally Posted by dmor71 View Post

        It seems you need to work a bit of grammar and spelling.
        Should read more like:

        Title:
        Are You An Affiliate Marketer? This is a Must-Read!

        The first sentence after bullet questions:
        If you answered "NO" to any of these you need to read Affiliate Sins immediately and stop losing thousands of $$$ in potential earnings.

        Also you misspelled "receive" in the last sentence.

        As far as I know, when you say "but one something" like here, it's the same as "at least" - it's a less common part of English, something e.g. professional writers use in books, I included it to catch the eye... of course unless I got the meaning wrong.

        Implementing your advice, will give a second version soon. Thanks for your input. Some of the mistakes are quite stupid, that's why I ask before I go live
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  • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
    I agree with Addy... You need to have a product graphic cover to help improve your landing page's conversion (in getting people to give you their email address). From experience, people would prefer to want to get a "look and feel" of what he/she is going to get for giving you his/her email address before deciding whether or not to commit...

    Hope this helps!

    Cheers
    Jun Yuan
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  • Profile picture of the author Kim Davis
    I would use the Deadly Mistakes line as a title instead of Are You....

    The line Are You Affiliate Marketer doesn't sound right, the word AN should be between You and Affiliate

    just enter email address and REVEIVE - spelling mistake - receive

    I would change Top Affiliate Marketer line to start with
    FREE Report by top affiliate marketer Franck Sylvestre


    I would change just enter you email line to
    Get Your Free Report, Affiliate Sins right away
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  • Profile picture of the author Jamericanman
    You say it is a "squeeze page" but it looks more like an Ad in a community newspaper, It needs a little work.
    It would seem you are not sure what you want it to be, an Ad or a page.
    Google your product or service and see what your competitors are doing, what their pages look like to get ideas.

    JamericanMan
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