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My first article

by forggy
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I wrote a short article for my site - more for keyword targeting than anything else really. If anybody has a minute to check it out and let me know what you think...that would be real cool.

follow the link in my sig (toitsfullest.com) and the article is called "menopause and depression"


Thanks in advance!
-froggy
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  • Profile picture of the author Ken Strong
    Is your username supposed to be "froggy"? Because it says "forggy" now... if you email the Help Desk they can probably change the spelling for you without you having to set up a whole new account...
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    • Profile picture of the author forggy
      Originally Posted by KenStrong View Post

      Is your username supposed to be "froggy"? Because it says "forggy" now... if you email the Help Desk they can probably change the spelling for you without you having to set up a whole new account...
      yeah...I messed that up...no big deal though.
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  • Profile picture of the author bombdiggity
    The first thing I noticed is that you need breaks inbetween paragraphs. The way your article is written now makes it hard to read, and to be honest, murder on the eyes.
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    • Profile picture of the author forggy
      Originally Posted by JoshuaCreighton View Post

      The first thing I noticed is that you need breaks inbetween paragraphs. The way your article is written now makes it hard to read, and to be honest, murder on the eyes.

      You are right. I fixed it.
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      • Profile picture of the author forggy
        Originally Posted by TMG Enterprises View Post

        The article itself seems fine to me and well-written. The formatting needs changing, though, in order to make it more reader friendly. I see that you've put the breaks in, as suggested above. I would also recommend making all lines left aligned.

        Using a traditional paragraph indent just doesn't work with the shorter paragraphs online. The purpose of the indent was to distinguish paragraphs when there is single spaced text with no breaks between paragraphs. In other words, the indent is redundant as the line breaks already serve the purpose.

        Tina G
        OK...fixed that too...thanks
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