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About to launch a product... Need some help

by Dburn
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Hey guys I'm getting very close to getting my product launched. This is the first time I've done this and I need a little help with my sales page. I haven't had any experience with copy and this is what I came up with

Sales Page

Any criticism or thoughts will definitely help me.

Thanks,

David Burnett
#copy writing #launch #make $ #product #sales page
  • Profile picture of the author sekharsub
    First impressions: looking nice. Why you want to give away a free report in a sales page. If at all you want to give it free atleast collect their email ids so that you can build a list
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    Why was your signature file linking to a domain owned by someone else?

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    • Profile picture of the author Dburn
      Originally Posted by sekharsub View Post

      First impressions: looking nice. Why you want to give away a free report in a sales page. If at all you want to give it free atleast collect their email ids so that you can build a list

      Thanks!

      I don't understand where you got the impression that I was giving it away free though... Did i put that somewhere in the sales page?
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      • Profile picture of the author preets
        Originally Posted by Dburn View Post

        Thanks!

        I don't understand where you got the impression that I was giving it away free though... Did i put that somewhere in the sales page?
        At bottom of your sales page " No Thanks Take Me To My Free Report"

        Apart from this you have to increase font size . Bonus offer #2 , ebook image need to be corrected .

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      • Profile picture of the author sekharsub
        Originally Posted by Dburn View Post

        Thanks!

        I don't understand where you got the impression that I was giving it away free though... Did i put that somewhere in the sales page?
        Look at the bottom of the page where it says no thanks
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        • Profile picture of the author Dburn
          Originally Posted by preets View Post

          At bottom of your sales page "

          Apart from this you have to increase font size . Bonus offer #2 , ebook image need to be corrected .

          Preeti
          Originally Posted by sekharsub View Post

          Look at the bottom of the page where it says no thanks

          Ohh I see. This was my oto after they opted in to my squeeze page. I will definitely get that fixed. And I will also Increase the font size thanks!
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          • Profile picture of the author preets
            Originally Posted by Dburn View Post

            Ohh I see. This was my oto after they opted in to my squeeze page. I will definitely get that fixed. And I will also Increase the font size thanks!
            Pls remove the hyperlink from the my quote , other wise people will start downloading your report. I have already removed the link from my reply .
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            • Profile picture of the author Dburn
              Originally Posted by Social App Zone View Post

              I have noticed looking at endless pages of this type from this forum is that Yellow or grabbing colours seem popular to throw points at the viewer. This page feels passive and does not scream Buy Me Buy 200 times.
              Noted thank you

              Originally Posted by preets View Post

              Pls remove the hyperlink from the my quote , other wise people will start downloading your report. I have already removed the link from my reply .
              Taken care of.
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      • Profile picture of the author dhaniramkesari
        I think it looks great so far but yeah check out that link at the bottom!

        A mistake here:
        (my family though I was crazy)," - thought

        And here:
        ( All those “Guru’s” out there) -Gurus

        Same mistakes for the following paragraph.

        8 Reasons why, your first point: don't forget your period!
        point four same deal
        point 8 has an asterisk instead of the number 8

        The writing sounds good and sorry for being so picky but I'm one of those people who believe that a sales letter should be perfect without any grammatical or spelling errors only because that directly impacts the way people think of you!

        Best advice from me, keep your voice and just check again for spelling and grammatical errors.
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  • Profile picture of the author Social App Zone
    I have noticed looking at endless pages of this type from this forum is that Yellow or grabbing colours seem popular to throw points at the viewer. This page feels passive and does not scream Buy Me Buy 200 times.
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  • Profile picture of the author Brendon Zahrndt
    David - I see a massive mistake.

    You sent me an email last night - send me another one with your Skype address and a time you can talk (soon) because I want to talk to you about it in person.

    Brendon
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    • Profile picture of the author Dburn
      Originally Posted by Brendon Zahrndt View Post

      David - I see a massive mistake.

      You sent me an email last night - send me another one with your Skype address and a time you can talk (soon) because I want to talk to you about it in person.

      Brendon
      OK sounds good I will
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