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11 years ago

Originally Posted by JustG

Hi There

I posted before about an e-book I have written. I have made a website for this now. The links to the various clickable elements do not work as yet. But I was wondering if people thought this was ok or there were improvements that could be made etc.

All feedback welcome

How to **** It Up

G

Catchy title, but you have spelling error, not good.

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JustG 11 years ago

ah not done a spell check yet - thanks for the heads up
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Jason Kanigan

11 years ago

As soon as you say "stone" you identify as in the UK.

Americans are unlikely to know what the term means.

I'd put both total pounds and stone/pounds on there.

Layout is fine.

"Family" is the typo.

Change your CTA from "this book could be for you" to "this book is for you".

You need a closing quotes for the book title in Ruben's quotation. I would put quotation marks at the beginning and end of each testimonial, to make it obvious that they are testimonials.

Fix the punctuation issues in your About the Author part.

Really, hire a proofreader/editor for $5 from fiverr.

The Pantomime Cow image is just baffling as one scrolls down. "What the heck is this?!" Needs a headline over it or an explanatory noun underneath. It's totally disconnected from the rest of the book offer and that's an issue.

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JustG

11 years ago

Originally Posted by Jason Kanigan

As soon as you say "stone" you identify as in the UK.

Americans are unlikely to know what the term means.

I'd put both total pounds and stone/pounds on there.

Layout is fine.

"Family" is the typo.

Change your CTA from "this book could be for you" to "this book is for you".

You need a closing quotes for the book title in Ruben's quotation. I would put quotation marks at the beginning and end of each testimonial, to make it obvious that they are testimonials.

Fix the punctuation issues in your About the Author part.

Really, hire a proofreader/editor for $5 from fiverr.

The Pantomime Cow image is just baffling as one scrolls down. "What the heck is this?!" Needs a headline over it or an explanatory noun underneath. It's totally disconnected from the rest of the book offer and that's an issue.

Hi Jason

Thanks for the feedback - the Pantomime Cow thing was just aimed at a special offer I am giving away on web hosting for people buying the book. I am in the process of building a page under the Pantomime Cow brand (the Pantomime thing might be a bit too English) - Pantomime Cows being traditionally made up of a back end and front end - ie we can host front end and back end websites.

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Jason Kanigan

11 years ago

Originally Posted by JustG

Hi Jason

Thanks for the feedback - the Pantomime Cow thing was just aimed at a special offer I am giving away on web hosting for people buying the book. I am in the process of building a page under the Pantomime Cow brand (the Pantomime thing might be a bit too English) - Pantomime Cows being traditionally made up of a back end and front end - ie we can host front end and back end websites.

*I* know what it's for. But the typical reader, who is SKIMMING NOT READING, won't.

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JustG 11 years ago

Hi Jason - I see your point - think I will make more emphasis on it,
G
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Barry Unruh

11 years ago

What is the point of the before and after pictures for weight loss?

It seems out of context with the rest of the page.

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JustG 11 years ago

Originally Posted by Barry Unruh

What is the point of the before and after pictures for weight loss?

It seems out of context with the rest of the page.

Hi Barry

Now I look at it with fresh eyes I see your point but it references it in the second paragraph - of about the author. They whole book is about the transformation of the things I have done wrong including huge weight gain

Thanks for the input - I think I need to make the link stronger
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totalprocessing.net 11 years ago

Originally Posted by Barry Unruh

What is the point of the before and after pictures for weight loss?

It seems out of context with the rest of the page.

Yea the pics before/after needs to be just the after
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nupur1

11 years ago

Spell check yet...

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JustG 11 years ago

Originally Posted by nupur1

Spell check yet...

Hi, Yes I have just done this but think the site still needs quite a bit of work after feedback on here. Back to the drawing board.

Regards

G
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dummycandoit

11 years ago

You seem like you know what your doing. Except for the URL,
"howtoeffitup.com " I don't like it. You'll match for search engine title searches, but who the hell is going to remember how to spell this? It's too confusing, " how toe" after that it's over. Nice page though.

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JustG

11 years ago

What domain name would you suggest I did struggle with this.

:-)

G

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jackcolton

11 years ago

Initial thoughts are...

1) Title needs to be How to NOT f**k it up. Without the "not," it doesn't seem like a motivational book off the cuff.

2) I like the simplicity of the design and how the book jumps out at you.

3) The copy on the page is missing compelling reasons for me to want to buy the book. You need to better communicate your transformation on the sales page, also to give more samples of what readers can expect to find within.

4) I'm American, have no clue what a stone equates too, haha.

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JustG

11 years ago

Originally Posted by jackcolton

Initial thoughts are...

1) Title needs to be How to NOT f**k it up. Without the "not," it doesn't seem like a motivational book off the cuff.

2) I like the simplicity of the design and how the book jumps out at you.

3) The copy on the page is missing compelling reasons for me to want to buy the book. You need to better communicate your transformation on the sales page, also to give more samples of what readers can expect to find within.

4) I'm American, have no clue what a stone equates too, haha.

Hi thanks for this feedback on this. I did think that about adding NOT into the title but I was taking inspiration from

How to be a Complete and Utter Failure in Life,...
I think you are right in what you say about giving people a reason to buy the book and perhaps more about talking about the transformation. Im going on holiday so have some good thinking time to get this cracked

Yes I do need to think about using stones lol

Thanks again

G

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prestonp

11 years ago

Check your website in developer tool under console section. Some style.css is returning 404.

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JustG 11 years ago

Thanks for the heads up on that I was not aware.

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