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Feedback

by John Blausey
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Hello,

First time on WF. Hope to offer some feedback of my own in the future.
I'm part of a ministry that struggles with explaining what we do.
I've created this page (guess you'd call it a landing page).
Most people I know are too close to the ministry and can't give objective feedback.

Looking for feedback on clarity of message as well as eye-appeal.
Is the problem/need clearly stated? Is the impact clear? Are you left confused?
I haven't entered definitions to odd words yet. Curious if those words are stumbling blocks.
Things that have a line through them are those items that I'm probably going to remove/replace.

Appreciate any feedback / comments.

http://freedomtolead.net/ftl-2/
#feedback
  • Profile picture of the author TMets5
    John
    Very nice message but my immediate thoughts is that there may be a better way to capture your visitors in the space above the fold (the large blue banner) before you scroll down. I think a captivating image there that helps explain you mission would help. Also, a lot of people may not know what "Storycentric Communication" means.

    You have a ton of content and pages on your site with a modern look, I just think that at first glance it's a bit basic. Maybe a nice video that explains your story and your goals along with an optin box to build an email list would improve your site features as well. Maybe visitors can opt-in to get on a mailing list and receive a daily prayer or scripture sent to them via email auto-responder.

    Regardless your work is great!
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  • Profile picture of the author Fredbou
    simpleA few comments:

    The link for storycentric communication needs to be completed

    "Storycentric Communication: definition goes here"

    I feel that the message above the fold takes up too much space.

    I wonder why you have the two sections of text in quotes with strike-through font decoration. It makes it seem like you don't want it to be read, which I am sure is not your intention.

    I don't know what a storycentric community is. Probably most other people wouldn't.

    You don't have a Meta Description in the <head>

    Other than that, the colors are nice and the layout is well presented.
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