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Is my sales copy OK?

by webinfinitynz
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Here's some of my copy that I'm asking for feedback / tips to improve please.



It's for a landing page, most traffic from Google Search ads (highly targeted, mostly people searching for 'Website design Wellington').

Heading 1...
Website design
that generate sales

Heading 2 (sub heading just below H1)...
Web design Wellington, converting visitors into customers, since 2009

And my first block of (large font) sales copy (which has a CTA button below it)...
What is the purpose of web design? It's relatively easy to design a beautiful website but it's useless if it doesn't generate customers for you. For a website to get real results, it also needs proven Infinity digital marketing elements to convert visitors into customers.
#copy #sales
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  • Profile picture of the author DWolfe
    Originally Posted by webinfinitynz View Post

    Here's some of my copy that I'm asking for feedback / tips to improve please.

    it also needs proven Infinity digital marketing elements
    Get rid of that sentence right ! A business owner does not care about that stuff, they want results.
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  • Profile picture of the author webinfinitynz
    Thanks DWolfe.


    So maybe this?
    It's relatively easy to design a beautiful website but it's useless if it doesn't generate customers for you. For a website to get real results, it also needs content and elements to convert visitors into customers.
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    • Profile picture of the author webinfinitynz
      I ended up with the same H1 and H2 then the copy below being;

      It's relatively easy to design a beautiful website but it's useless if it doesn't generate customers for you. For a website to get real results, it also needs content to convert visitors into customers.
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      • Profile picture of the author DABK
        Is Your Website Costing You Clients?
        Get Your Website To Sell More

        The average website converts 2% of visitors; well -
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  • Profile picture of the author Jamell
    I notice that your landing page has 2 headings stating different things which is confusing . I think your CTA needs to be more definitive and direct .
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