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Not your Ordinary Copy Critique

by MikeTheBuilder
2 replies
Hello Fellow Warriors,

I'm a general contractor looking for some advice on my web copy. I'm looking to see where and what could be changed to improve conversions. What better place than the Warrior forum!

I know some of you are really good at web copy, I've seen some really good sales pages that sometimes compel me to BUY NOW! Hahahaa...

So, if anyone cares to offer up some advice, many thanks to you.. Please don't hold back!

Thanks in advance,
MIke..

Here's the website: *removed*
#copy #critique #ordinary
  • Profile picture of the author Ross James
    Your business is right next door to me. I could literally shoot a nail right through your window... kidding... but I'm from Boston...do you have skype?... I could help you with generating more leads.

    Ross
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Your page is as vanilla as they come. You headline is a yawn. I've done some writing in this niche and discovered a great hook. It's actually no secret because most people needing contractors have expereinced the same thing. That is:

    FLAKY CONTRACTOR SYNDROME

    You know. You hire a company of a guy and they seem really qualified... at first. But right away you notice they're late in showing up, they have under-bid the job and are almost immediately over budget and then the nightmare begins.

    I'd develop the copy to remedy flaky contractor syndrome because there are plenty of people who will relate to it. You also need a proofreader. Good luck.
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