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Posted: 13 years ago 16 replies

COPY WRITING

Alright...

Took into account what everyone has been saying and made a new set this 3rd time around. and thank you to everyone that has helped so far!

Alright...

Been at it a while so I think I am headed to bed for now but will catch up with the thread in the morning.

Tear it apart! criticism is accepted, say whatever you want. My feelings wont be hurt!

Cheers,
Karson

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13 years ago

Back this morning and don't seem to be getting any feedback... hmmm maybe it's a good round of them this time!
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13 years ago

i like the layout of option 2 better. it just seems a little more organized, i cant explain why, but its more visually appealing to me.

as far as critiques, the only one that comes to mind is putting the email opt-in form before the video. this is only because when i first got on the page, i tried to press play to playback the vid. might be a little confusing to people especially if you dont scroll down to look at the whole page. same goes for option 1.

grabbing their email for your list is your goal for the squeeze page, why put it at the bottom? put it at the top or make it a side bar. hopefully this helps you out a little bit.
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13 years ago

Hey I really appreciate that, that is a very good idea!
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13 years ago

I would have the opt-in to the right hand side of the video, so all the content is above the fold. this seems to be the way the guru's are doing it now, I would suspect after multiple tests.

Example:

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13 years ago

Hmm never know. I will probably move the optin above the video and make one with it on the side and split test too. Thanks MIB!
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  Hmm never know. I will probably move the optin above the video and make one with it on the side and split test too. Thanks MIB!
  
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  I like second option. Image of the product makes it much better.
  
  And yes, try to keep everything above the fold and use word "presentation" instead of "video".
  
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13 years ago

Cool thank you MIB and Andrew! Think I am about ready to give all these version I have a go with split testing.
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13 years ago

I like the second one. Pretty open and inviting.
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13 years ago

Who cares what anyone thinks?

do you want opinions or opt ins?

how about you stop asking for 4 million critiques and start testing the damn thing already.

grab some money and start buying traffic.

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13 years ago

Originally Posted by davemiz

Who cares what anyone thinks?

do you want opinions or opt ins?

how about you stop asking for 4 million critiques and start testing the damn thing already.

grab some money and start buying traffic.

This.

Stop stalling. Start testing.

Good luck.

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13 years ago

I like the layout of option 2 more. I think the graphics need a little cleaning up and maybe have the header a bit larger, if that is possible. I would also center the bottom text and "get instant access" button. I would add a border around the text and "get instant access" button as well with a light blue background in the bordered area.
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13 years ago

Hey Kason,

Second one looks more organised why don't you try put some work on designing ??

I can create a squeeze page for you if want...
just reply me i'll do it for you..
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13 years ago

The first one isn't a squeeze page in my opinion. The second one is almost a squeeze page, but you still have a leak.

The job of a squeeze page is to get the opt-in, nothing else. Any option you place on the page besides the option to submit the email address will decrease it's effectiveness. I'm talking about the page peal, it needs to go.
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13 years ago

first options seems significantly better to me!

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13 years ago

Originally Posted by davemiz

Who cares what anyone thinks?

do you want opinions or opt ins?

how about you stop asking for 4 million critiques and start testing the damn thing already.

grab some money and start buying traffic.

Thanks... had already started testing when you posted this... appreciate the..... constructive... response.

Originally Posted by rohit36

Hey Kason,

Second one looks more organised why don't you try put some work on designing ??

I can create a squeeze page for you if want...
just reply me i'll do it for you..

It's all good... I'm enjoying the process

Originally Posted by Michael D Forbes

The first one isn't a squeeze page in my opinion. The second one is almost a squeeze page, but you still have a leak.

The job of a squeeze page is to get the opt-in, nothing else. Any option you place on the page besides the option to submit the email address will decrease it's effectiveness. I'm talking about the page peal, it needs to go.

Indeed I put that on the domain afterwards. I have since moved the same optin page to a subdomain.

Originally Posted by NXmarketeer

first options seems significantly better to me!

I appreciate the response!

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