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Attention Internet Marketers V3
I really appreciate your help and advice.
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Thank you in advance - your suggestions and feedback are appreciated....ml
Attention Struggling Internet Marketers
After Six Years, Countless Courses, Thousands of Dollars Invested and Letter after Letter…
…I Finally Get It - And so will you.
If you have ever struggled to get the results you want from your sales letter or marketing material then this message is for you.
The answer will surprise you. In fact you’re probably going to be amazed! This secret has doubled, tripled and more the performance of each sales letter it’s used on every single time. It has outperformed any element in any market since the dawn of time – it’s that good.
How good is it? If your letter isn’t using it you’ll never get the results you want – ever. It’s the saving grace of all marketing material across the globe in every market. You can use it in video, audio, written material or even spoken across a table.
What is this fantastic secret? Don’t worry, I’ll tell you in a moment. However, before I tell you what it is, let me tell you a few facts that explain why this element is so darn good.
Yes, it’s true. In terms of sheer bottom line profitability, emotion has been the absolute best tangible element of superior marketing and sales of all time. Are you surprised? Probably not! You’ve heard it a thousand times. But why is it so elusive?
Because it’s a right brain activity, most of us are logical and analytical. Especially when writing sales copy it’s just not easy to do. Sure you can research your markets hot buttons til you’re blue in the face but if you struggle putting them on paper you’ll never get the results you want.
So, if you’re anything like me (or most other internet marketers) and you’re struggling to get the results you want for your marketing pains. You’re at the right place at the right time.
I’m going to make you a ridiculous offer that you won’t be able to refuse.
If you do you’ll thump yourself later for not accepting it because it’s that good.
I’ve been a struggling copywriter for over 6 years. Like you, I’ve written my own promotions and I failed miserably. I’ve been paid to write for other marketers and didn’t help them get the results they hoped for. It’s bothered me – A LOT!
So I went through my material to find the element that makes all writing fail when it fails. I went back to all of my copywriting courses looking for that one single thing that I was missing. I studied all the block buster promotions looking for that one solitary ingredient that pushes it over the top. I studied all the great stories, movies, and writings that have always been inspiring and motivating. And finally I found it. But more importantly I discovered how to use it.
So, here’s my offer. I’ll help you and you can help me. Allow me to write a new sales letter for your product, throw some traffic at it and if it converts better than your current sales letter you can pay me. More importantly – I want your testimonial; in fact I need your testimonial to get bigger and better clients. You need me to help you improve sales.
You have absolutely nothing to lose. If my letter doesn’t work, you don’t pay me. If my letter doesn’t outperform your current letter, you don’t pay me. If my letter completely bombs you owe me nothing. You only pay me when I get results.
You have to keep track of your results though. And I’ll do my best to write the most emotionally packed, emotionally compelling copy you’ve ever had.
Win-win!
You must allow me to review your product and it must be good – nobody can write great money-making copy for a lousy product. So call or email me now to get started.
I can only write so many – call me right away.
I’ve sent this letter to some of your competitors – if you don’t take me up on my offer somebody will, and if it’s your competition don’t wonder why they’re out selling you.
You’ll know why!
You'll find them here
Attention Internet Marketers V3
I really appreciate your help and advice.
---------------------
Thank you in advance - your suggestions and feedback are appreciated....ml
Attention Struggling Internet Marketers
Finally the Remarkable Secret to
Exponential Sales and Profit
Exponential Sales and Profit
After Six Years, Countless Courses, Thousands of Dollars Invested and Letter after Letter…
…I Finally Get It - And so will you.
If you have ever struggled to get the results you want from your sales letter or marketing material then this message is for you.
The answer will surprise you. In fact you’re probably going to be amazed! This secret has doubled, tripled and more the performance of each sales letter it’s used on every single time. It has outperformed any element in any market since the dawn of time – it’s that good.
How good is it? If your letter isn’t using it you’ll never get the results you want – ever. It’s the saving grace of all marketing material across the globe in every market. You can use it in video, audio, written material or even spoken across a table.
What is this fantastic secret? Don’t worry, I’ll tell you in a moment. However, before I tell you what it is, let me tell you a few facts that explain why this element is so darn good.
- It will motivate your prospects to take action
- It will persuade people without them knowing why
- It’s so subtle you’re reading it now
- It inspires people to do things they never thought they would
- It influences peoples decision making process
- It’s used repeatedly in every selling situation
- It will captivate any audience to practically buy on command
Yes, it’s true. In terms of sheer bottom line profitability, emotion has been the absolute best tangible element of superior marketing and sales of all time. Are you surprised? Probably not! You’ve heard it a thousand times. But why is it so elusive?
Because it’s a right brain activity, most of us are logical and analytical. Especially when writing sales copy it’s just not easy to do. Sure you can research your markets hot buttons til you’re blue in the face but if you struggle putting them on paper you’ll never get the results you want.
So, if you’re anything like me (or most other internet marketers) and you’re struggling to get the results you want for your marketing pains. You’re at the right place at the right time.
I’m going to make you a ridiculous offer that you won’t be able to refuse.
If you do you’ll thump yourself later for not accepting it because it’s that good.
I’ve been a struggling copywriter for over 6 years. Like you, I’ve written my own promotions and I failed miserably. I’ve been paid to write for other marketers and didn’t help them get the results they hoped for. It’s bothered me – A LOT!
So I went through my material to find the element that makes all writing fail when it fails. I went back to all of my copywriting courses looking for that one single thing that I was missing. I studied all the block buster promotions looking for that one solitary ingredient that pushes it over the top. I studied all the great stories, movies, and writings that have always been inspiring and motivating. And finally I found it. But more importantly I discovered how to use it.
So, here’s my offer. I’ll help you and you can help me. Allow me to write a new sales letter for your product, throw some traffic at it and if it converts better than your current sales letter you can pay me. More importantly – I want your testimonial; in fact I need your testimonial to get bigger and better clients. You need me to help you improve sales.
You have absolutely nothing to lose. If my letter doesn’t work, you don’t pay me. If my letter doesn’t outperform your current letter, you don’t pay me. If my letter completely bombs you owe me nothing. You only pay me when I get results.
You have to keep track of your results though. And I’ll do my best to write the most emotionally packed, emotionally compelling copy you’ve ever had.
Win-win!
You must allow me to review your product and it must be good – nobody can write great money-making copy for a lousy product. So call or email me now to get started.
I can only write so many – call me right away.
I’ve sent this letter to some of your competitors – if you don’t take me up on my offer somebody will, and if it’s your competition don’t wonder why they’re out selling you.
You’ll know why!
Andrew Gould
BenPalmerWilson Copywriting
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