My first EVER Squeeze Page (Critique)

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It is about as basic as can be: http://www.20lbsofmuscle.com/

Any recommendations? Too basic? Need better headline?

I am using optimize press and I feel that Copyright shouldn't be on the bottom to remove the scroll bar, but I don't know how to remove that.
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  • Profile picture of the author Aaron Autrey
    This is good, man. Simple, basic, pointer arrows, can't go wrong!
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  • Profile picture of the author TerranceCharles
    Looks damn good James, and don't worry about the copyright. You can always put copyright 20lbsofmuscle.com - If anything, you could maybe tweak the title a little bit more to give a better description with benefits
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    • Profile picture of the author jamescanz
      Originally Posted by marketforus1 View Post

      This is good, man. Simple, basic, pointer arrows, can't go wrong!
      Originally Posted by TerranceCharles View Post

      Looks damn good James, and don't worry about the copyright. You can always put copyright 20lbsofmuscle.com - If anything, you could maybe tweak the title a little bit more to give a better description with benefits
      Thanks guys!
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    • Profile picture of the author Cool Hand Luke
      Originally Posted by TerranceCharles View Post

      Looks damn good James, and don't worry about the copyright. You can always put copyright 20lbsofmuscle.com - If anything, you could maybe tweak the title a little bit more to give a better description with benefits
      You are confusing copywrite and copyright. They do not mean the same thing.
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      • Profile picture of the author superpayouts
        Originally Posted by Cool Hand Luke View Post

        You are confusing copywrite and copyright. They do not mean the same thing.
        Your the only one talking about copywrite here. Im pretty sure we all know there's a difference. lol.
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        • Profile picture of the author Cool Hand Luke
          Originally Posted by superpayouts View Post

          Your the only one talking about copywrite here. Im pretty sure we all know there's a difference. lol.
          Reading comprehension (and spelling) is clearly not your strong suit.
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          • Profile picture of the author IM Lover
            Originally Posted by Cool Hand Luke View Post

            Reading comprehension (and spelling) is clearly not your strong suit.
            Made me chuckle thanks. On Topic, I think it looks great, nice and simple. Good job!.
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  • Profile picture of the author jojohn07
    This is good, man. Simple, basic, pointer arrows, can't go wrong!
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  • Profile picture of the author wlasikiewicz
    Sometimes the simpler method is the best. I think it looks good, just split test it and see what works for you.
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    • Profile picture of the author jamescanz
      Originally Posted by wlasikiewicz View Post

      Sometimes the simpler method is the best. I think it looks good, just split test it and see what works for you.
      Thanks everyone.

      When it comes to split testing, do I just make another page and switch up the headlines, maybe colors or opt in box, and basically test one for X amount of days and then switch to the other one for X amount of days?
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      • Profile picture of the author Andrew Gould
        Originally Posted by jamescanz View Post

        When it comes to split testing, do I just make another page and switch up the headlines, maybe colors or opt in box, and basically test one for X amount of days and then switch to the other one for X amount of days?
        For a basic A/B split test, make a copy of the page you want to improve and change one element of it. The original page is called the control, the copy is called the test.

        Looking at your page, I think the easiest test to start with would be the headline - at the moment it's focused on the promise, I'd test focusing on the problem.

        Then you use split testing software to run both at the same time - half your traffic being sent to the control, the other half to the test. You don't want to run one after the other because external factors that might be present one week, but not the next, can affect conversion (holidays, product launches, etc).

        Sooner or later, depending on the amount of traffic you're getting, one page will win and that will be your new control. Be careful not to stop the test as soon as one page moves ahead - you want to wait for the result to be statistically significant, meaning the result is not down to chance.

        Then rinse and repeat.

        When you get more experienced, and if you've got the traffic, you can test more than one variation and even more than one element (multivariate testing).

        P.S. There's a recent thread with split testing software recommendations here:

        http://www.warriorforum.com/copywrit...o-you-use.html
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  • That squeeze page is looking good, James.
    I like your design it's a simple and professional looking design, that's all you need.
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  • Yes it's a great squeeze page. It's very unusual for the headline alone (and the copy on the book graphics) to hit the target bang on, without having to use bullets as well.

    Hitting a target without bullets - whatever next?

    Although, it's another thing you can test.

    Good luck, but with lots of targeted traffic I don't think you'll need any luck, it should to be a winner.


    Steve
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  • Profile picture of the author james4078
    Simple, uncluttered and right to the point.
    Not bad for your first one.
    Are you planning on making more with different approaches?
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  • Profile picture of the author shifat
    Looks good james !BTW you used optimizepress to built that opt in,right?
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    • Profile picture of the author jamescanz
      Originally Posted by Andrew Gould View Post

      For a basic A/B split test, make a copy of the page you want to improve and change one element of it. The original page is called the control, the copy is called the test.

      Looking at your page, I think the easiest test to start with would be the headline - at the moment it's focused on the promise, I'd test focusing on the problem.

      Then you use split testing software to run both at the same time - half your traffic being sent to the control, the other half to the test. You don't want to run one after the other because external factors that might be present one week, but not the next, can affect conversion (holidays, product launches, etc).

      Sooner or later, depending on the amount of traffic you're getting, one page will win and that will be your new control. Be careful not to stop the test as soon as one page moves ahead - you want to wait for the result to be statistically significant, meaning the result is not down to chance.

      Then rinse and repeat.

      When you get more experienced, and if you've got the traffic, you can test more than one variation and even more than one element (multivariate testing).

      P.S. There's a recent thread with split testing software recommendations here:

      http://www.warriorforum.com/copywrit...o-you-use.html
      Awesome input, greatly appreciated

      Originally Posted by TheBeautifulMinds View Post

      That squeeze page is looking good, James.
      I like your design it's a simple and professional looking design, that's all you need.
      Originally Posted by bigrayban View Post

      looking good mate
      Thanks!

      Originally Posted by james4078 View Post

      Simple, uncluttered and right to the point.
      Not bad for your first one.
      Are you planning on making more with different approaches?
      In the future, yup. At the moment, I need to stop spending so much time on the specifics and get some traffic to it.

      Originally Posted by shifat View Post

      Looks good james !BTW you used optimizepress to built that opt in,right?
      Yup yup!

      I love optimize press. It would have taken me about 100 days and 100 more dollars to create what I did there in a couple of hours.
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