This is my first official sales letter after having read copywriting material and studying some Halbert ads.
Some feedback would be greatly appreciated
(Please don't give me negative feedback just so I'll hire you. I want to learn copywriting myself and I think I have the ability to get great. Also I have no money. Give me real, honest critical feedback. Infact, be as brutally honest as you can. I love failing and learning from my mistakes)
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