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Quick Sales Page Critique

by SuperChef
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Hey- I've never made a sales page before, so I was hoping I could get some input on this one:

www . getfreeconcerttickets . com (spaces before & after each dot)

I'm open to any suggestions. I worked really hard on this product, and I think it's awesome, so I want the sales page to be top-notch too.

Thanks in advance
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  • Profile picture of the author Luffy
    If i were you, I don't add buy so fast
    tell them more about your problems and experience more before know this methods
    tell them you have some problems like everyone else

    try to be in their shoes..
    i mean, put your self like the buyer

    and then try to add sentence that make them do an action
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  • Profile picture of the author Blame It On The Caffeine
    Doesn't look too bad. The copy itself seems good- but the text is flat and dull looking- maybe try a different font.
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  • Profile picture of the author unstoppableflow
    Originally Posted by SuperChef View Post

    Hey- I've never made a sales page before, so I was hoping I could get some input on this one:

    www . getfreeconcerttickets . com (spaces before & after each dot)

    I'm open to any suggestions. I worked really hard on this product, and I think it's awesome, so I want the sales page to be top-notch too.

    Thanks in advance
    looks solid...but i would like to know a bit more about whats inside the book

    how do you plan to market it?
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    • Profile picture of the author SuperChef
      Originally Posted by Luffy View Post

      If i were you, I don't add buy so fast
      tell them more about your problems and experience more before know this methods
      tell them you have some problems like everyone else

      try to be in their shoes..
      i mean, put your self like the buyer

      and then try to add sentence that make them do an action
      Thanks, I was actually curious about this while writing it. I feel like I read articles or whatever about being "above the fold", so I tried to get to the point ASAP. I guess since my product is a larger purchase, on the other hand, people want to read more before buying.

      Originally Posted by Blame It On The Caffeine View Post

      Doesn't look too bad. The copy itself seems good- but the text is flat and dull looking- maybe try a different font.
      Yep that was another concern I had. I'll switch it up to something better.

      Originally Posted by unstoppableflow View Post

      looks solid...but i would like to know a bit more about whats inside the book

      how do you plan to market it?
      So you think I should describe the contents more before the call-to-action?

      I plan to market using affiliates and solo ads on music blogs and other related sites. I don't want to do SEO or create a blog- that may seem stupid to a lot of users here, but I really think paid advertisement is the way to go. If I can write a good copy and get eyes in front of it, people will buy. It's a compelling offer and the value is much more than what I'm charging.
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  • Profile picture of the author SuperChef
    I have another question, but I don't want to start another thread.

    I was thinking about putting my Ebook up on a bunch of affiliate sites (Clickbank, paydotcom, etc.) and buying ads and banners on blogs and sites. Then, after a reasonable amount of time, I'd cut out the lowest performers.

    Is this an intelligent approach?
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  • Profile picture of the author goindeep
    Originally Posted by SuperChef View Post

    Hey- I've never made a sales page before, so I was hoping I could get some input on this one:

    www . getfreeconcerttickets . com (spaces before & after each dot)

    I'm open to any suggestions. I worked really hard on this product, and I think it's awesome, so I want the sales page to be top-notch too.

    Thanks in advance
    You need more emotion.

    You need to show me and tell me that seeing the red hot chilli peppers is a once in a lifetime opportunity and that not having $700 should not keep me from doing it.

    You need to name the bands, the shows.

    You need more reviews, more testimonials and i'd like to see more proof of your tickets and free entries into massive gigs.

    Good luck.
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